What do you think of this poem? :)?

Interesting poem premise. I think I would change the inversion "Tainted hands you have acquired" to "You have acquired tainted hands." Also, the line "supposed friends leave you now/screaming as they went" is a little awkward as it changes verb tenses. "Supposed friends left you screaming when they went" would be better as you would have two past tenses instead of flip-flopping between present tense "leave" and past tense "went."